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Teensy Weensy Valentiny Writing Fun!
Although I’ve seen her children’s books, I never came across author Susanna Leonard Hill’s website until today. I didn’t know what I was missing, and now I’m hooked! A friend told me about an intriguing writing contest, which led me to Susanna’s blog. The instructions were to write no more than 214 words about a grumpy Valentine experience! It had to show grumpiness and had to be appropriate for children. Unable to resist such a clever challenge, I put a little (pardon the pun) something together. Do you get it? Why Susanna chose that specific word length?
I showed my story to my mother (aka/Biggest Fan), and she said, “So clever! I was right there in the bowl!” This will make more sense once you read my teensy tale. Mom and Dad both said some other glowing things about how amazing I am, but I’ll leave all that out since they’re rather biased. I’ve never written anything so short, but it was fun! I encourage all my writer friends to try something like this. It made me chuckle and stretched my keyboarding fingers and squishy brain a bit. I mean, my two sisters (Hi, Margaret and Ginger!) will be the first ones to tell you that I’m terrible at math! But, hey, I can count to 214. 😉 Here’s my entry. Feel free to comment or read it to your kiddos. Happy Valentine’s Day!
KANDIE’S KISS (214 words) – by Cathey Graham Nickell
Kandie buried herself as deep as possible. She wiggled and squirmed until she was hidden by her heart-shaped friends.
What kind of Valentine’s Day surprise am I? Kandie scowled from the bottom of the bowl. She peeked out. That just made her even crankier.
“I’m all wrong!” she wailed, eyeing the other sweets. “How can you smile and feel sugary at a time like this?!”
Old Man Tart chuckled from across the way, “What’s yer bellyaching about?”
“You all have such beautiful words. I’m a fructose failure,” Kandie sulked.
She had a point. Old Man Tart’s tummy boldly stated: HUG ME! Pinky’s bragged: TOO CUTE! Why, Honey’s phrase even proposed: MARRY ME!
Kandie glanced down irritably at her own letters. “HISS ME?” Seriously. “HISS ME?” she pouted. “Someone at the factory cannot spell! Whoever heard of a candy heart that says HISS ME? I’ll never find a Valentine! No one will want me!”
Old Man Tart waited for her to finish complaining. He cleared his throat and said, “A wise person once said there is someone for everyone. Kandie, I’m sure you’ll find your match.”
I should try to be optimistic, Kandie thought, scooting back to the top of the bowl. And the first person she spotted was Gummy Snake smiling shyly at her.
UPDATE: Amazingly, I won second place in this writing contest!
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Kristine Hall
Adorable! And you would never know it was a challenge with a word count parameter — it’s perfect! Thanks for sharing.
Cathey Nickell
Thank you! 🙂
Julie Luyster
I thoroughly enjoyed ” Kandie’s Kiss”, a ” sweet” short story that children of all ages will find amusing.. It is funny and has a sweet little message to all; there is someone for everyone, and it’s alright to be different ~
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Cathey Nickell
Thanks, Julie! I’m glad it made “sense” … you’ll get what I mean! lol. 🙂
Julie Luyster
” Being Different Makes Sense” ? 🙂
I also like the message at the end … When Kandie was optimistic… Her cup ” was half full”
Heather Dent
Hiss me! Haha! That is so cute! Love this idea.
Cathey Nickell
Thanks, Heather! I found this writing challenge to be really fun!
Gabi Snyder
Haha — funny twist at the end! Cute story with a clever POV.
Cathey Nickell
😉
Gregory E Bray
I like it. Well done! =)
Cathey Nickell
Thank you, Greg! Wow, I appreciate your note!
Jaclyn Kruzie
I love fructose failure! 🙂 good job
Cathey Nickell
Aw, thanks! 🙂 I appreciate you taking time to comment! (That was my favorite line, too!)
Cathey Nickell
I loved meeting you in NYC at the SCBWI, let’s keep in touch! – Cathey (I followed your FB page!)
JEN
What a fun candy twist! Of course the Gummy Snake is the Valentine for Kandie. 🙂
Cathey Nickell
Right, I mean, who else?
Jean James
This was a really cute story and reminded me of my father in law’s more gruff version of saying “there’s someone for everyone” that always makes me laugh, it goes “there’s a seat for every a**” lol. Not quite a phrase for children, but a keeper in my book. Good luck in the contest.
Cathey Nickell
That’s really funny! I’m cracking up! Thanks for the comment, Jean.
Christie Allred (@ChristieAllred)
Haha! Now that’s a fun twist. Good job, and good luck in the contest 🙂
Cathey Nickell
Thank you! Happy Valentines Day!
Laura
What a unique POV. Great job.
Cathey Nickell
Thank you! I had fun pretending to be a piece of candy. 🙂
Susanna Leonard Hill
Hahaha! So cute, Cathey! Just goes to show there’s a perfect match for everyone – even a conversation heart that says “hiss me” 🙂 Thanks so much for a clever, creative and fun entry!
Cathey Nickell
Oh, you are so sweet! Sweet like a candy heart 😉
Thanks for the fun contest, I really enjoyed it!
Shelley Kinder
I ADORE fructose failure!!!!! And the whole “hiss” concept…brilliant! LOVE your story! Congratulations on making it to the finals. I too recently discovered Susanna’s contests (2 contests ago, the Halloween one) and I’m SO addicted. After the winter holiday one, I took her class, which was also very helpful! Writing is such a process, isn’t it?!? I LOVE learning day by day how to make my writing better. Good luck to you 🙂
Cathey Nickell
Oh my gosh, thank you! You are so nice. I was shocked to be a finalist! I really never expected it, and this was my first time to enter something like this. Very validating! Yes, I’m going to keep on writing in these contests, I think. So fun! Yes, it’s a huge process, and I’m still learning. So glad to “know” you! 🙂